"See you at dinner tonight" were his last words before he left for hunting that afternoon.
Now she is fragile and enervated, but only physically.
Every evening she stumbles her way towards the door and opens it to someone. Maybe she hears him come. Maybe he’ll come.
This was poignant and beautiful. I used to work with the elderly, and this was such a lovely description of so many that I knew and loved. I loved this, because it touched me and took me to another place and time. Well done!!!
ReplyDeleteIt's inspired from a story my grandmother had told him long ago. I'm so glad it had that effect on you too which it had on me.
DeleteYour gracious compliments made my day! Thank you so much :)
awww..:-( the emotions are so well captured, wonderful!
ReplyDeleteThank you Uma. I guess when you actually feel the other soul, you can capture it well too!
DeleteHope..never dies in the strong..its nice:)
ReplyDeleteHope is what keeps us going in the high tides that life brings to to.
DeleteThank you A Writer. Welcome to my blog :)
Brings us* to. God bless my brain!
DeleteThis is a touching tale indeed.....and the title is perfect for the longing in this piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you C.C. Her longing had to be justified.
DeleteThis makes me feel sad, it reminds me of my grandmother towards the end if her life. Beautifully written, you capture this subject matter with such a light touch.
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry about your grandmother. She must have been a strong woman! May God give strength to the old, calling souls out there.
DeleteThank you for appreciating :)
This is beautiful...the emotions evoked are so strong!
ReplyDeleteI'm glad you could feel the emotions here. Thank you !
DeleteBeautifully crafted. Hope is eternal, for this woman, anyway.
ReplyDeleteFor us all believers, hope shall be eternal. Thank you Susan :)
DeleteAww that's so said but her faith and believing is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteShe is a beautiful old lady :)
DeleteWelcome to my blog.
The heartbeats tied with threads of longing and waiting. Lovely 42.
ReplyDeleteLovely comment!
Deletesad- especially with the image.
ReplyDeleteAdding the image wasn't intended to make you sad though. ;)
DeleteThank you for stopping by!
Unique, poignant take on the prompt. The rhythm and sounds of those last 3 lines are really lovely.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Jennifer! I love hearing comments from you :)
DeleteThis is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ishan. Beauty lies in the eyes of the beholder in fact ;)
DeleteSuch a beautiful story, even though it leaves you sad.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Don't be sad for the lady, she isn't feeble :)
DeletePrecious and poignant indeed.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Barbara.
DeleteSo touching, Soumyaa...
ReplyDeleteStill waiting for her loved one...Hope rules in her heart...
And she probably knows too that he's never going to be back. Atleast not alive!
DeleteThank you for stopping by Anita.
Such sad longing left with unfinished business. 'Hunting' gives it a tragic edge.
ReplyDeleteI can actually feel her pain :( What torture it must be to wait eternally. So well written, Soumyaa!
ReplyDeletetrue, it must have caused her a lot of pain.
DeleteThank you Shailaja :)
total awwww. I love this.
ReplyDeleteJen, you're always so generous! :D
DeleteOh this one made my cry, but it's beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the old woman could reach your soul :)
DeleteThank you!
Your calling attention to the fact that she's only physically fragile adds so much to the subject's personality. Very well written!
ReplyDeleteThank you so very much. I wanted to show how she's still mentally upright and strong.
DeleteThis is so moving, Soumyaa. I especially love this, for how it sounds and what it means: "Every evening she stumbles her way towards the door and opens it to someone."
ReplyDeleteIt feels so good hearing comments like yours Meg. That's the first thing I read in the morning today, and hurray! :)
DeletePowerful words that moves us to no end..the unflinching belief:)
ReplyDeleteUnflinching it was!
DeleteThank you for your appreciation Vishal .
A very moving plot. My heart goes out for her.
ReplyDeleteSo touching :( True love still exists. Loved it Soumyaa :)
ReplyDeleteThank you A :)
DeleteAwww..that is so moving and touching...a stirring piece indeed
ReplyDeleteI'm glad it stirred you, Ankita
DeleteHi, this is a very touching ! Hope she will not be disappointed.
ReplyDeletewhat a poignant story. Beautifully penned.
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