Monday 30 June 2014

My Mislaid Mermaid #168


I walked them through my mermaid reveries,
Withstanding the tone of their infinite vagaries

Right!
Worthlessly they snapped
Whatever you say
The words were capped,
Horsepucky!
Cried girls from Kentucky,
Some silent hmm-s and reliefs
On my unstable Utopian beliefs

Well, in case you’re ready with your crusade,
They've already stolen my mermaid. 

                                                       
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The Ultimate Question- 
Are you on your way to steal my mermaid?


                                                               

20 comments:

  1. Your rhyming scheme is awesome. I really dug this.

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  2. Don't listen to those nasty voices, just keep swimming.

    This just flowed, such a pretty piece.

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  3. Loved the rollicking flow of this. Fun to read.

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  4. Oh! Hope you get your mermaid soon, Soumyaa!
    Nice poem :)

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  5. Wow, totally different take. Really enjoyed the bouncing pace here. Keep on with the crusade!

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    1. That was my first try with this rhyming scheme. Glad you liked :)

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  6. It's not easy rhyming with "Kentucky" either!

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    1. Haha! I tried the inverse actually. 'Hosepucky' came to me before 'Kentucky'

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  7. Oh, yeah, I love the rhyme scheme, too. I think this is my favorite line: "unstable Utopian beliefs"--definitely brings me over to the speaker's side!

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    1. Thanks Jennifer. I did not have to give much thought over that line. It just fitted well the first time. Worked, I guess!

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  8. You are SO good with rhyme. Thanks for the enjoyable read!

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    1. Thank you! Now i know atleast somebody is listening to my mislaid mermaid reveries!

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