Friday, 13 June 2014

The Shooting Wishes

This week's word for five sentence fiction is - Wishes. Here's my take.

As I blazed across the sky, a family lying on the footpath closed their eyes together and wished for four walls and a roof.

On seeing my streak through her french windows, the little girl from the chateau ran towards the window and wished she had someone who'd hold her hand tightly in their's and pull her closer.

Crowded by fellow dancers and appreciators, the woman wished on me to have her husband's client meeting postponed that evening- he never had the time.

Out of the bar, just in time to catch a glimpse of my fainting trails of flame, the man looked up and wished for a job soon for he was tired of spending the day at JoJo's.

I shot my way across the other stars in the night sky and wished I did not have to see the begging faces every night.

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Wishes. Will we ever have enough of them?


Lillie McFerrin Writes

31 comments:

  1. oh! I had never given much thought about how the star felt hearing everyone making a wish on it! quite a different take on the prompt! loved it :)

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    1. Thank you Swathi.
      I don't really know if the star has can really fulfil those wishes, but then well, it saddens on seeing the people wish on everything that they dont have, never thank the star for what they do have!
      Im glad you liked it :)

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    2. The star can* not has can. Sorry!

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  2. All i have to say is wow! What a different and unique take of the prompt

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    1. 'Wow's always make my day! Thank you Juhi.

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  3. That was so good......and, no, we can never have enough of wishes.....they are a never ending lot!!

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    1. Never ending indeed, because the grass will always remain greener on the other side!
      Thank you Shilpa.

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  4. our wish list tends to infinity..as we never stop. i like this different but amazing way in which you presented the 5 sentence fiction ;) !

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    1. Rightly mentioned, until the world doesn't end, there will always be something more you want from life. And who knows what after life looks like ;)
      Welcome to my blog Crimson Curls

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  5. Personification of a star. How well you've done that! And all those wishes... oh, how they must ache!

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  6. Yes it must hurt. The irony is that what is a wish for one, is a liabily for another.
    But that's how life runs!

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  7. Nicely written, happy to find this post and to see this level of creativity.
    Keep it up ! Good Job :)

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    1. Dear Anonymous,
      Thank you so much for stopping by. Keep coming for more creativity and better posts :)

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  8. Superb Soumyaa :-) Loved your unique take on the prompt :)

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  9. so true..we wish for one thing and then another, the list never ends..and a nice take from the wishing star's point of view.

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  10. Ah this is such a refreshingly different perspective on a falling star! Very impressive...never thought about it from that angle! Awesome :)

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    1. We often forget the little aspects of life. Thank you Vinodini! Coming from you, the value increases. :D

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  11. This is one of the amazing ones I got a chance to read . Loved every line . Beautifully written and superb thoughts .of a star ;)

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    1. Haha! Star indeed ;)
      That comment is going to help me sleep peacefully tonight. I'm glad you got a chance to read this. Thank you Sushree.

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  12. Awesome and soul stirring. How we wish our deep thoughts are heard by some unknown force...love every word beautifully woven:)

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    1. That's what I wanted to portray. Thank you so much Vishal.

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  13. Lovely! I totally would not have thought to do a star POV.

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    1. Some stories, some ideas just click! I sit down with my laptop and start somewhere. Gradually something pops up which is worth settling down at!
      Thank you Avra-sha!

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  14. WOW! This is the best take on the prompt!

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    1. WOW! That was the most generous comment ;)
      Thank you Namrata

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  15. That was a very nice post. A gamut of wishes. Very Good
    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

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    1. Gamut of wishes, very well said.
      Thank you Tina

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