Monday, 9 June 2014

Grace-fully silent

She had always put work before him, before the family. A day before their trip to Switzerland he heard his voice call beep, "Honey, I'm soo sorry but i had to reschedule our trip. Don't get mad yet, listen to me now..." But the door shut behind him. Her last words were, "..so just pack the bags, we're leaving in 2 hours!"

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  1. Like where you went with this one :)

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  2. Very clever take on the prompt.

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  3. Oh, tragic! You did a great job of pulling me right into the story.

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    1. Tragic indeed. Thank you for being here Jennifer!

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  4. You knew you were going to go anyway.

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    1. I guess i did, Chamblee.
      Thank you for being here :)

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  5. a deep breath and waiting a moment can help in so many ways.

    I'm so sorry he didn't wait. He should have waited.

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    1. Oh, the importance of that one deep breath cannot be emphasized enough. Only if everybody thought like you do, Kir.

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    1. Isn't it? I'd never want to be in the shoes of either of them.

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  7. Oh no! He should have waited!! Great story!! ♥

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    1. Thank you for that warmth, Kathy :D

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  8. I wouldn't want to be in their shoes, either!

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    1. No! Only if I get to keep the Switzerland part, though ;)
      Thank you for being here Jen

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  9. Ohhh, so sad. It must have been one time too many.

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    1. They've created I mess I guess. And none could escape the blame.

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    1. Men, men, men, men, many men!
      And somewhere in a corner two men are discussing about women I'm sure ;)

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  11. The ending was crafted so well.

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  12. I like your angle on this. The last part is sad, I guess he got too used to hearing the worst :(

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    1. Yes, and this time he thought he knew better.
      Thank you for appreciating my angle :)

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  13. Oh, too little, too late. Great take!

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    1. 'Too little, too late' wow.
      Thank you for that perspective

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  14. Yes indeed -- sometimes all the doors are shut.

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    1. We close them for ourselves! Being poised has its own benefits then :)
      Thank you Bjorn!

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  15. I love the response that you get Soum :)
    You really make me crave to hold on and read more.

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    1. I have such an inclination here to say that I love you! That comment coming from you makes me crave to write more.

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  16. Oh, so sad! Of course, ironically, moving the date up is as arrogant as moving it back.

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    1. This time though, she put him before her work.

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  17. Oh dear. If only he'd waited until the end. Great build of emotion in this to that sad ending.

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    1. Thank you for those kind words Sarah!

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  18. The straw that broke the camel's back. You clinched that moment when the life-changing decision is made and you painted a clear picture of what happens to this story after the words stop. Well executed, Soumyaa!

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    1. Thank you! Those were very generous words.

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  19. Too many disappointments - she taught him not to trust her. I'm not sure who I feel sorrier for... Nice job - thanks for linking up!

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    1. Me neither. You need two hands for a bro-fist I guess ;)
      Thank you for being here Christine.

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